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2021-05-22 02:19

i really love your story, grammar isn't great but very readable, storyline, characters, world background are also great. I am also thinking about creating one Original Story myself and I want to ask you for tips if you don't mind.

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Well, I don't really know how much I can help you. I mean, I have been write for like 5 months, and before that, I was not too fond of languages and things to do with writingβ€”Thats why my grammar is so bad. But I will say that Originals are easier to write than fanfiction. Why? Because you can do what you want. In fanfictions, you need to follow the law the original writer made in that world/novel. Now don't take it that you can make something true that makes no sense, or if you want to do it like that, you will need a good explanation of why something works like that. Like my story, I already know about 5 plot holes that I don't know how to fix yet. This is the reason why rewrite taking so long. Oh, and I have been reading your fanfictions. It is good, and I like it, but you move too fast with some story plots. With fanfictions, it's fine to do that, but with originals, you can't move too fast with it. In some cases, it's fine, but this is your world your creating. Why do you want to move fast past some things? (Cough, we won't talk about the 3-year time skip) Oh, one more thing. It would be best if you plan your novel. I didn't do that with Kitsuna; I just wrote what came to mind. I thought it would fail after a month or so, and here we are 5 months later with 82 chapters. I need to stop self-gloating. Sigh anyway, all I can say. Originals are made out of your imagination, not someone else's. In other words, do what you like, what you want the MC to be or to become. When I saw what you wrote on your MHA/JJK fanfiction, I also thought you would start your own novel, and I invite you to come and join us, original novel makers. That was CRINGE to the max. Just ignore me. Uhm, if this helps somehow, Goodluck and I will be reading.

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