Review Detail of Everythinger_Kumar in Doomed from the Beginning

You have a gripping plot. I am not that interested in fantasy but I had some exceptions and yours gets in the list. The dialogue delivery that persists throughout the story is simple and yet being its main objective - to convey what the character is trying to say. I think you have succeeded in having eyes- friendly (Yeah I just made that up XD) dialogue structures. I also observe that you haven’t extensively given attention to detail that would otherwise spoil the story if you had mishandled it. I think simplicity of detail really suits your story. It’s just what I feel... if you wish to be the descriptive JRR Tolkien, then I have no objections. It’s your story after all. I think you have also taken care of grammar and stuff and I really appreciate you using different dialogue tags (it kinda kept me active during the reading and again it comes to simplicity in descriptiveness) Overall, very nicely written!