Review Detail of CodeW in My roommate is a devil

Okay. General Pros and Cons review: Pro: Character dialogue. Your written dialogue perfectly shows the character's personalities. Plot development is also good-I liked how it quickly evolved into a vampire related story. Cons: Grammar. Setting description. Those two things are the only things that hold your writing back. With grammar, there will be better execution. Setting descriptions can certainly help make the reader's mental image more vivid. Best of luck to you, CodeW