Review Detail of JustGo in The Cost of Immortality.

Hi everyone!! I am making a *Modest review* of my own work. XD This book will have quite a slow start as I try to improve as a writer and explain the world the best I can. I have been planning the rules and system the world has to follow and it is going to take a while to explain everything. Anyway please comment if you like the novel so far, any and all advise on how to better my writing and story will be much appreciated!! Thanks and Kind Regards!! JustGo