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Sevnir
SevnirLv153yr
2021-01-19 11:22

Extremely repetitive writing. Half of the paragraphs just reword previous paragraphs (e.g. "He was nervous because it was his first time." "Because it was his first time, he was anxious." and a handful of other rephrasings...some one right after the other). Then the author uses A LOT of extra unnecessary descriptions for movement. It feels like he says, "He turned his body, lifted up his arm, extended his fist, and pointed at the object with his index finger," instead of just saying, "He pointed at the object." It feels like 50% of the chapters could be erased with zero clarity lost...in fact it would increase clarity. Characters are one dimensional and boring. Barely any MEANINGFUL world background or description. Especially bad since the author seems to randomly use four different ranking systems terms for monster strength with no rhyme nor reason (stage, level, star, and rank).

I Can See the Lines of Fortune

Inflated GuGuGu
4.7
40 Chs

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VoiD_dEmOn
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Too good... I always like pocket hunting dimensions and so was very hopeful for this book too. PHD author is one of the few Chinese author who does have any nationalism and racism in his novel. This novel is excellent too. MC is hilarious and strong. His ability is not that OP and he have to depend on himself to became OP. Hope this story would be selected.

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Xhaare
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To this novel, I can only express my utter disappointment. I feel stifled, empty, even. Happiness left me too fast. 40 chapters did nothing more than wet my appetite. This novel has everything I’ve ever wanted. I loved it, 40 chapters wasn’t enough. I want to MTL it, but I don’t want MTL to ruin this. All I can say is that if this gets picked, I will gladly buy privelage for an extra 25 chapters. I won’t review this and say why it’s good. Read it. Suffer with me while we wait for it to be picked; curse the loss of 20 chapters. Feel my pain.

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MyrdalHerseim
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This isn't the same author who wrote pocket hunting dimension, the author of pocket hunting dimension was only recommending this novel, that's all.

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DantalianNote
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Even better than Pocket Hunting Dimension!!! A thousand times better!!! The author has really outdone himself this time. He really did a wonderful job in balancing out the MC's character. This novel is unlike his previous novel where the Main character's actions felt as if they were forced and his pushy character that always acted submissive when talking to his sister or any other female character. The MC's character in this novel is clearly defined, he acts logically, emotionally, with a hint of humour and still retains his whole character. The world-building is also marvelously done. I have not noticed any plot holes as of yet, and I hope there won't be any in the future. As of now I truly hope that this novel gets picked, it truly deserves at least that!!!!

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AzureConqueror
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Awesome novel. Here's the name of the raw - 我能看到氣運線 For those who can't copy paste on here like me, the name of the raw in google translate means - I can see the gas line

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Rumon
RumonLv5

This needs go be chosen. This is basicaly a serious anD better version of ‘im not the Son of providence’. It doesn’t have any Young masters or anything dumb Like that and the mc knows how to use his powers effectively. Oh the biggest thing is that theres No system or reincarnation so the mc is genuinely smart.

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Eddicted
EddictedLv5

It's a pity to see that even a garbage level novel here can get an average rating of 4.7 stars. May be these Chinese readers would become diehard fans if they ever got to read a proper novel with all the required ingredients (ofcourse they should be able to keep aside their racist prejudice before that ).

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TheDolphin
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Eh, doesn't stand out to me personally. P.S Can a fellow Daoist enlighten this junior brother on how to post a review under 140 characters, as I see my fellow brothers are quiet skilled in this aspect.

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Grandmist_Sage
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petition to bring back the world of deities.........................................................................................................................

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