you don't tell us anything your writing is trash and you can't even commentate right not for me it's very bad in my opinion and the story is everywhere you never explain things!!!
adem_walker
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LIKEI am very so- you know what I can't be nice to this sir, I am not a writer I did this for fun, and even I admit I cannot write but that does not give you the right to be a to a piece of crap ok I HOPE YOU A NICE DAY!!!!! p.s I am not telling you to stop giving criticism but when you're doing it be nicer it's hard to write ok sir (btw if your a female I don't really care :)