Review Detail of Jasonenrick in Gamer in Game of Thrones
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Writing Quality 4-Stars Story Development 4-Stars Character Design 3-Stars Updating Stability 2-Stars World Background 3 -Stars Reasons below ---> First of all... [Writing Quality]: It is honestly not that bad as you can understand everything. But it isn't the cream of the top and we* the community* do not expect that in the slightest because as I said in nearly all my reviews, it is Webnovel and not Fanfiction.net or any other platform, there are a lot out there! Webnovel isn't the quality platform where you can expect many Literature masterpieces. Anyway, on the next... [Story Development]: The Story pushes onward and in a direction I like, I think. To be serious, I don't know exactly where this Story is going, which is a good thing, it leaves the readers curious. He lives in Essos at the moment and could go anywhere. He could build an Empire, be a simple traveler, IDK, just read to know it! .... [Character Deisgn]: I don't know how to explain it but I'll try it. The Mc or this story/Novel has a bit of personality, even if not much, and shows that he cares about the people he loves, which isn't that good of a thing in GOT honestly....but that is my opinion. He*Mc* isn't an Intelligent one and I doubt it will change because the author is writing the Story and unlike the Mc, he doesn't have a System to raise his intelligence, no offense. Really! The Mc makes some very stupid mistakes which could bit him in his arse at a later date and It would in the real world, which I do not doubt, but as the author writes the story he just doesn't do it. Etc etc. ..... [Updating Stability]: Not much to say here, it isn't regularly and that's why the US is so low rated in my review. But nobody knows what is going on in the RL and what the author does and what his motivation is, so there's that. [World Background]: I think the author made some big mistakes and he also stated that he didn't read the books which makes a few things difficult but not to the point where we*the readers* have to despair. It isn't out of the place so far but the author made a mistake with the maesters. I think you'll see it for yourself if you have enough knowledge of the ASOIAF-universe. That's it with the review. I could write further but I am tired and want to stop writing. 😴 If the author or other people have questions about some of my points then please comment here, bye!
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That's one hell of a review you did there bud, the fact that you wrote all that just shows me how much you like the novel... hopefully. [Writing Quality] Not much to say here, I agree with you on everything. :) [Story Developement] Thanks for the four stars, I know in my head what major events he will take part in and how he'll change canon. I like how my readers don't know what I have planned for the future. [Character Design] I agree that to this point the MC hasn't had much to show his personality, it's basically been a training montage until now. He isn't some caring and loving person, the only people he cares for are his grandpa, uncle, and brother... Harold and Lorik are strong enough to look after themselves and Graham is a very old and sick my that will die most likely to old age. I don't know what to say about being called stupid... what mistakes did he make? that he told his three family members about his magic, I will never write a story with an MC that doesn't trust anyone... please tell me the other mistakes so that I may see them. [Updating Stability] I have several novels that need updating and I just bought Cyberpunk 2077, so I really want to play that. [World Background] While I may not have read the books, I have done a **** ton of reading on many places, lore, history, and many other things. What mistakes did I make with the Maesters? please clarify. Thank you so much for the constructive criticism and not just "YOUR STORY IS TRASH KID, KILL YOURSELF", it means more than you could possibly know that you took time out of your day to help me.
Well, I understand that you want to play Cyberpunk277 after waiting 8 years imao!🤣 First of all, I am no fan of naive hero complex Mc's so I have no problem with an Mc that isn't caring or loving. I also don't want him to keep magic a secret from his 'family' but it's an entirely another point if you consider in what World he lives in and who he is talking to. He can tell his 'friend' or short term companion when he is older. His grandfather won't live long, either way, so no problem there with keeping it a secret. He should tell them when he is stronger and can defend himself in the possibility that they want to harm him because no every person likes magical people in the ASOIAF universe. Most people despise and hate them. And there's the mistake he made. Maesters despise and hate everything that has to do with magic. Sure, he* the master mentioned* could be one of the 1 out of 1000 maesters that are magic fanatics but the possibility is high. So that was a mistake that could or would have seen him killed if this wasn't a Story but in RL. I hope I made some things clear, if not then write to me again. It is currently half-past two in the middle of the night and I am not that clear-headed anymore.
Fanfiction_Fanatic:That's one hell of a review you did there bud, the fact that you wrote all that just shows me how much you like the novel... hopefully. [Writing Quality] Not much to say here, I agree with you on everything. :) [Story Developement] Thanks for the four stars, I know in my head what major events he will take part in and how he'll change canon. I like how my readers don't know what I have planned for the future. [Character Design] I agree that to this point the MC hasn't had much to show his personality, it's basically been a training montage until now. He isn't some caring and loving person, the only people he cares for are his grandpa, uncle, and brother... Harold and Lorik are strong enough to look after themselves and Graham is a very old and sick my that will die most likely to old age. I don't know what to say about being called stupid... what mistakes did he make? that he told his three family members about his magic, I will never write a story with an MC that doesn't trust anyone... please tell me the other mistakes so that I may see them. [Updating Stability] I have several novels that need updating and I just bought Cyberpunk 2077, so I really want to play that. [World Background] While I may not have read the books, I have done a **** ton of reading on many places, lore, history, and many other things. What mistakes did I make with the Maesters? please clarify. Thank you so much for the constructive criticism and not just "YOUR STORY IS TRASH KID, KILL YOURSELF", it means more than you could possibly know that you took time out of your day to help me.
I agree that i probably told them too early but if I could change it, I probably wouldn't. I like an MC that isn't perfect, he'll make mistakes and have personality traits that people dislike. No one is perfect and that's how i like it.
Jasonenrick:Well, I understand that you want to play Cyberpunk277 after waiting 8 years imao!🤣 First of all, I am no fan of naive hero complex Mc's so I have no problem with an Mc that isn't caring or loving. I also don't want him to keep magic a secret from his 'family' but it's an entirely another point if you consider in what World he lives in and who he is talking to. He can tell his 'friend' or short term companion when he is older. His grandfather won't live long, either way, so no problem there with keeping it a secret. He should tell them when he is stronger and can defend himself in the possibility that they want to harm him because no every person likes magical people in the ASOIAF universe. Most people despise and hate them. And there's the mistake he made. Maesters despise and hate everything that has to do with magic. Sure, he* the master mentioned* could be one of the 1 out of 1000 maesters that are magic fanatics but the possibility is high. So that was a mistake that could or would have seen him killed if this wasn't a Story but in RL. I hope I made some things clear, if not then write to me again. It is currently half-past two in the middle of the night and I am not that clear-headed anymore.