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Aeternabilis
AeternabilisLv14

The story isn't bad but not that great either. A lot of things seem to change depending on the convenience of the author which brings down the story massively. The mc was stated to easily crush both chubby samurai and the king guy. However, when it got to the martial arts tournament they suddenly get a massive power-up so that author can acc write about the tournament... If the mc didn't use any ki throughout the whole tournament this would have been much more interesting. By constantly using it to win all his fights made it extremely dull and boring... This is a trend that follows throughout the story so yeah. Then there is the massive copout of having a weaker body than everyone else but with massive ki reserves. This NEEDS to be fixed. It's just so stupid, anyone even normal adults of dragon ball verse can one-shot him if he isn't shielding himself constantly. It's kind of a joke taken to far and has been constantly used as a plot device of why he cannot do certain things. It just rly brings down the quality of the story even further than before. ki as a whole strengthens the body no? It's like a modifier on the base stats? Not rly sure. But surely it doesn't make sense that if the mc has that much ki his body has to be a certain strength? The story is a bit slow as well but I guess you can't rly do much until the start of canon. Would have been nice to see more in-depth training on ki. Like the way, he trains it. How to make it grow, what if he makes it as a whole denser etc. The changes it has on his body when it does grow, get denser more powerful etc. I like that he isn't op as they get boring real fast. Just as long as he can keep up and carry himself it would be interesting. Like you have the whole precise style going on so maybe he can focus on atking nerves, weak points etc. Maybe use the huuga? Style of bypassing amour and atking inside the body. So organs etc if that makes sense? Just more creativity tbh cause so far it is very lacklustre. I mean all he has done in the story so far is growing up on a farm and do the general bodybuilding training, lifting rocks etc to then train in martial arts from a minor character to fight in the tournament who's only opponents he faced properly without that ki ball were his friends who he bought with him... like what tf was the point? So yeah up to the author, in the end, these are just my opinions from reading the 27 chapters out and if fixed etc I think this could be ten times better.

Sage_Fire
Sage_FireLv2

Well, It's more Interesting Like This , don't Drop this story please. The reason I like this is because you are trying something different than other authors, All of them Only care about Harem and Always and i mean ALWAYS crazy about the Saiyan Bloodline, Their stories Will Get stuck at some point and If they Continue regardless, They can't explain Anything like how they Got the Bloodlin, If we look at it. And Then They Become Way too OP that it Su*ks, I always lose interest in those, they start focusing on Harem in later part of the story, They taint the Original Fighting Genre and Start to look like booring And ii mean BOOOOOOOOOORIIIING And Ridiculously Annoying to read afterwards, You would have start thinking with the other brain To Continue these stories,. And If they aren't Doing 'I AM A SAIYAN' then they do I AM A HUMAN WITH ZENKAI AND LIMITLESS POTENTIAL, PRAISE ME!!! And if god Is not making the wish true, They Request each and everything from the dragon Balls, They Wish for the same things that The heroes are trying others to wish, They ask 'Immortality' and 'Infinite Ki' and Then Act like They Own everything... Typical Chinese novel Sh*t Please, Make the Wish something like 'Give me Training methods To Fix my Condition of overflowing Ki' because 'Fix My body' Will have a loophole That You will have to wish for it again. Wish For something Which is sufficient, But not overly Overpowered and permanent. And Only Use this Single wish until the Break between Dragon ball and Dragon Ball Z. They have a 6-7 yrs timeskip, I asked the wish For 'Training Methods' Because he Can Teach it to others as well, So the wish will not Be Selfish, The plot Is ruined anyway and You cannot guarantee that You can rely on Freiza Killing Krillin To save your Asses On namek , Because Raditz will get his Ass beaten Pretty badly. ? Hey I Know, Why don't you Genderbend Raditz? And As For Another wish In the timeskip, You could ask for 'Fuinjutsu Knowledge' As it will be within The range Of Expectations. And he can Seal Raditz's Ki and keep him/her(Lol if u do that) alive. If Vegeta Can change then Raditz can also change. Just Promise power or Make him/her(lol) motivated to Defeat him(MC). You can also Ask For Gravity Chamber From dr.Breifs After u find the Capsule Near goku's house for Technological Support to be able to create 100x chamber... These are just my suggestions, You can use some and leave some Just don't Ask Selfish Wishes like those hypocrite Authors , Or it will Become Something like Repeating and Overused Xianxia Plot, Etc Etc...

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