Review Detail of Jasonenrick in Scarlet Conqueror
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Ok, I quickly changed my mind here. Quality 4 - Stars because I believe it to be decent enough in Spanish but I am not fluent in Spanish or can even speak it so I have to use a translator and this doesn't make things easier! Story Development is 1 - Stars because while I absolutely loved the introduction and the beginning, it doesn't get better. It solely gets more and more confusing with things happening that have no explanation or even a hint that the author may have thought about it because the Story seems to me as if the author randomly thought of things and wrote them down them without thinking! Man, that was a lengthy sentence! Character Design 2 - Stars. I have no idea what he is thinking or have any idea what his personality is like. At the beginning of the Story, he sounded genuinely cool and badass. But after a few chapters, he seems like a Chaotic Evil Mc that wants to kill everybody and anything to get more points. I understand the Orcs and I would understand your enemies but......anyway. Confusing as hell! Update Stability 5 - Stars as of now but that will and I know it, change in the future. World Background 1 - Star. the WB isn't assessable to the readers and randomly things get added( Feels like to me )! Also, you have no concept of powers because Spartans apparently are better than anything and everything! One trows a spear at a magician that embodied a Shield with his magic but the spear just how to throw the shield and kills him as it the spear was thrown by a God that magic couldn't resist or the spear itself was a divine item when in reality it is a bronze spear more likely because Spartans didn't have proper equipment in their age! I mean, the people living in this World have mithril and other OP steal and you go and want to make us clear that bronze is OP, laughable!
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Thanks for your comments, the weapons of the Spartans in the war were under the blessing of Maximus's war heart who made them of pure gold and anti magic that's why they are strong, the orc soldiers only had a simple armor of heavy steel that's why they were massacred and the magicians who were in the border city were only common magicians or magic students, they were not war magicians and the only one who carried mithril was the prince atlas because it is a very rare material and the personality of the protagonist mmm I will only tell you That will be cruel if necessary. I don't want to be a psychopath, so sometimes I introduce comedy. I'll fix that and specify more from now on, please be patient it's my first novel: v
I know that this is your first Novel, it is obvious but nobody, not me or others will name you for that! I just try to tell you what I find lacking! Also, That's what I meant, you for yourself can explain why things happen like the spear with the Mc's blessing or that only the Prince has mithril but nobody else knows that except you! We only know that the soldiers wear armor and the prince has mithril armor which makes us readers assume that the soldiers have good castle forged armor and weapons that are much better than the Spartans armor and weapons!
Rex_Prometeus: Thanks for your comments, the weapons of the Spartans in the war were under the blessing of Maximus's war heart who made them of pure gold and anti magic that's why they are strong, the orc soldiers only had a simple armor of heavy steel that's why they were massacred and the magicians who were in the border city were only common magicians or magic students, they were not war magicians and the only one who carried mithril was the prince atlas because it is a very rare material and the personality of the protagonist mmm I will only tell you That will be cruel if necessary. I don't want to be a psychopath, so sometimes I introduce comedy. I'll fix that and specify more from now on, please be patient it's my first novel: v
If you're right, that's why I made a chapter where Maximus and the other Spartans went crazy for the death of one of his close friends unjustly and kills all living beings in the city at the end I put the Greek gods and the gods of that world , I deleted it because I felt it was too exaggerated, so I changed it, But I am still thinking of a place where to install the Spartans and re-fuse the Kingdom of Sparta and expand its culture and add part of others so that they reach perfection.
Jasonenrick:I have to edit something I forgot! Why make the Spartan sound as if they are crazy people that only how to kill and be bloodthirsty monsters! Yes, they are good at war but they have heart, honor, and are good men in their hearts!
I understand Thank you I will try to specify as much as possible, you are right I was wrong in thinking that others will assume the same as me, so leave those details aside Please, if you have any more recommendations, tell me to improve the novel and be more pleasant to the readers
Jasonenrick:I know that this is your first Novel, it is obvious but nobody, not me or others will name you for that! I just try to tell you what I find lacking! Also, That's what I meant, you for yourself can explain why things happen like the spear with the Mc's blessing or that only the Prince has mithril but nobody else knows that except you! We only know that the soldiers wear armor and the prince has mithril armor which makes us readers assume that the soldiers have good castle forged armor and weapons that are much better than the Spartans armor and weapons!
Yeah, I think I won't anymore because after chapter 9 everything went shit jack and I know of a certainty that I will drop it, sorry. Chapter 9 was honestly the worst out of all the chapters so far. He is less a spartan and more of a coward. "We can talk?"???? He is a Spartan wtf is he talking about. Then his soldiers laughing at him while he is fighting against his enemy??? Wtf Then we have the woman's father who is out of nowhere a Demi-God! This whole chapter was a disgrace to all Spartans and a disappointment to all readers and I am only honest here, we have no bad blood between us and I only say my real thoughts! Please, just take a bit of your time to think of a decent plot before writing this, okay? It is honestly so very much random that it isn't even funny anymore.
Rex_Prometeus:I understand Thank you I will try to specify as much as possible, you are right I was wrong in thinking that others will assume the same as me, so leave those details aside Please, if you have any more recommendations, tell me to improve the novel and be more pleasant to the readers
i was really hyped from the sypnosis but It was in spanish. You Will have to forgive me for not Reading further chapter 1 as i didnt manage to understand anything. I would only like to Ask if you have planned for the future the english version? im sure you can manage It since i saw your comments and thats some fine english. thanks in Advance
Rex_Prometeus:I understand Thank you I will try to specify as much as possible, you are right I was wrong in thinking that others will assume the same as me, so leave those details aside Please, if you have any more recommendations, tell me to improve the novel and be more pleasant to the readers