Review Detail of KuroiSenkoGr in Red-Eyed. Devil.(Hiatus).
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I just cant Mr. author. I can't read this fic even if I want to and I like how you structure your story but the dialogue man the dialogue it's killing the story for me. I can't just read a fic with a dialogue that's like "Bla Bla Bla Bla"(name of speaker here). If you rewrite your dialogue then I will give it a shot. This story doesn't deserve 5 stars from all the reviews I have seen that give it 5 stars, I don't know what the others think good fanfic and story is but with a dialogue like this fic isn't a good one. Keep up the good work Mr. author but try and read some fics and see how they do their dialogue.
Red-Eyed. Devil.(Hiatus).
ClearSkySage
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My problem isn't the parentheses it's that when someone speaks I want to imagine the scene not read it like a script from a movie. For example "I really like your dress, it brings out y...."(character speaking here) he stopped midsentence after feeling a cold piercing gaze on his back. Describe the setting man the little ticks of the characters when they speak when you describe them makes them feel more real not just a bunch of dialogue.
ClearSkySage:Have you ever thought of the extremely simple solution of ignoring the (***)... Like wtf? you didn't like something because of some parentheses, I am honestly speechless. Anyway, thanks for reading and I hope you find a lot of novels that don't use parentheses...image
Thanks for the help, I changed it and it was even better for my writing. Thank you. Sorry if I sounded like a jackass before, but you won't believe the number of whiny brats that this site has... Again, thank you for the advice. I really appreciate it.
KuroiSenkoGr:My problem isn't the parentheses it's that when someone speaks I want to imagine the scene not read it like a script from a movie. For example "I really like your dress, it brings out y...."(character speaking here) he stopped midsentence after feeling a cold piercing gaze on his back. Describe the setting man the little ticks of the characters when they speak when you describe them makes them feel more real not just a bunch of dialogue.
Your story especially the flow of it now is awesome. I am not going to start reading your stories until you rewrite the older chapters and the few that you changed makes me want to read them but I am going to wait for you to rewrite the dialogues or just start a new fic with this kind of o dialogue. I can't wait, man, keep up the good work and keep your ideas making this shitfest of the site with harems and all wish-fulfillment fics a better place to enjoy quality fics.
ClearSkySage:Thanks for the help, I changed it and it was even better for my writing. Thank you. Sorry if I sounded like a jackass before, but you won't believe the number of whiny brats that this site has... Again, thank you for the advice. I really appreciate it.
KuroiSenkoGr:Your story especially the flow of it now is awesome. I am not going to start reading your stories until you rewrite the older chapters and the few that you changed makes me want to read them but I am going to wait for you to rewrite the dialogues or just start a new fic with this kind of o dialogue. I can't wait, man, keep up the good work and keep your ideas making this shitfest of the site with harems and all wish-fulfillment fics a better place to enjoy quality fics.
ClearSkySage:Thanks, m8, and again, sorry for being a jackass previously.
In our defense, it is pretty frustrating when you put so much effort and time into something, publish it for free, and then someones comes to complain. But that still doesn't excuse the asshole behavior. Sorry.
KuroiSenkoGr:No problem I have got worse responses from other authors yours was way nicer [img=recommend]