Review Detail of Eugene_OMalley in Deception

I'm not usually one to read vampire stories, but seeing things from a Nepalese point of view intrigues me. The pacing is a little odd for the first few chapters, but overall the story has a nice mystery angle. Only critique, maybe provide a few more details as to what the MC and her best friend look like in their introductions. I think it's going to be interesting to see how this story will progress. Keep up the good work, Mr. Author and you'll do great things.