Review Detail of SolAce in ALWAYS BEEN YOU

The plot is thought out, and I can feel the characters’ emotions. And I can feel this is probably going to be a possessive male mc paired with a feisty female counterpart. Out of all the characters, I enjoy the female mc the most; however, the male one sounds slightly unreasonable and immature. While it does push the plot forward, I cannot sincerely sympathize with the man. Another thing I would like to point out is the flow isn’t as polished. Like for example, in the first chapter, the one that popped out to me was that for nearly the next several paragraphs, there were only ‘He’ as the subject. My solution is to vary the subjects up a little, and not repeat the same subject since it does break the immersion for your readers. Last but not least, I’ve noticed ellipses not only in dialogue but also in normal sentences, which wouldn’t necessarily be a problem if it weren’t for how numerous they were as well as they were creating fragments. My suggestion is to make it into whole sentences without trying to creat suspense. You would be surprised by how suspense can be created without using the ellipse method. So in conclusion, the flow could be improved, but don’t worry ! I think this definitely has potential if it could be polished more, so keep up the good work, Author !