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2020-11-30 03:31

I don’t like romance, but I always give an honest review. Your story plotline is interesting and there is some comedy mixed inside. I like your writing style in the first chapter, but for some reason you changed it up after that on the dialogue part. There are a few grammar mistakes than can easily be caught with rereading it and there are times that I am confused on the POV. Other than that you have doing nice going here, keep up the good work!

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