Horrible writing.
Ok, the author writes for fun, but it is right to look at it with a critical eye.
If he just wanted to have fun he could just write, without publishing.
Furthermore, it is right that a reader can judge a work
Writing Quality: 2/5. I wanted to put one on, but since the author himself said to write for fun, I can give a 2. He knows he's not a writing teacher and doesn't even want to look like one.
I don't write very well myself, but as a reader I would like to understand what I read.
There are POV changes every 3 lines...
The publications are slow, but being a Fan fiction and writing for fun, I put 3 stars.
This is because he writes when he wants, the solution I like best. He doesn't write unwillingly, perhaps even ruining the story he has in mind, just because readers ask for the chapters.
Story Development: 3/5
Good storytelling pace, neither too fast nor too slow. The story moves at the right pace.
What happens is another matter. Too confusing story, given that the development of its power is too random.
World Background: 2/5. No description, but it's fictional, so don't expect too much.
Character Design: 2/5. Protagonist written with the feet. Decent father and mother.
I conclude by saying that I will probably not read the rest of the work if it ever continues.
