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2021-01-05 19:19

From what I've read, the webnovel is charming and fun. If I had to hold something against it, i'd say that the writing is quite simplistic. There's a heavy reliance on exposition, a tool one expects less and less when one reaches *****hood. Arguably the simplicity of the writing lends the novel to accessibility, but it does make it seem a bit childish at times. Ultimately, i'm not so much of a snob that i'd turn my nose at a fun and accessible adventure. I look forward to the next update.

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Thanks for the review :) To be honest, this is the first book I wrote and I too realized that mistake. I was also planning to revise the first chapters. I'll try my best to take up your suggestions. Thanks

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