Review Detail of TheDolphin in I am the Universe
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Premise is very unique, but grammar reads like a MTL and it’s dfficult to understand anything. Even without grammar my biggest fear is the protag starting to shift into a human mindset, or god forbid, stay in his human form. Also might just be the rough grammar but looks like he randomly got a system, and author started to randomly add words like Imaginination Points without context. The biggest reason it can hold a 3.4 star is the unique premise. Fix grammar and it can be a 4.5. Make protag act like a human and be all empathetic then it drops to a 2 star novel, even if the grammar is fixed. Hope you keep up the effort, if it impoves or gets worse I’ll post another review. -Novelizer
I am the Universe
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The main character won't change into a human mind set, he is like a reader a viewer of show as he unravels what happens. He is a neutral entity that watches the universe unfold. He won't be humanized. He will just experiment with the universe to understand it. Like a studying a disease. I know my biggest problem is clarity and grammar because I am second language, which doesn't let my imagination be as clear. Difficult to understand which parts, I will love if you told me what parts needs clearing up... Imagination points? That will be fixed. AI? That will be easily fixed because people already told me about that and I know how to fix that because I already though of it. Thank you for the real feedback, if you could tell me what needs clearing, then that will be big merit.