Review Detail of Thereviewer48 in Pentakill: Rebirth of the Legend

Thanks for the review! I just wanted to address somethings I guess. 1. In terms of writing style, I tend to be pretty wordy lolol. I was super curious as to what you meant by "not made? (never really heard the term before sorry ;-;). I try to reread most of the chapters at least three times to check for grammatical mistakes and wording issues, so I was just curious as to what I could improve upon. 2. The world background is supposed to be quite literally the world that we are living in. There's nothing super special about it rip, and the game is based very loosely on League of Legends. I'm guessing you haven't really played before, so I was curious as to how confusing the first chapter was from a non-player perspective. Thank you so much!

*not bad (sorry writing in comments in WN is terrible) I play videosgames, I'm a gamer, but I never played LoL. And so could other people who read your story. You have to add more descriptions for people to know about the games background; not everyone who read gaming novels play games. That is why I put that. (I hope I didn't sound mean).

And you are too wordy on some sentences, that don't need it, so it can be clearer for readers. Maybe try grammarly? It is a good helper, our eyes do not catch everything like other people's eyes.

*videogames

Nah, your review was great! I just was really confused for a second about what that meant ripriprip. I have the general description of the game around like chapter four I think? I just didn't really want to describe what the game was in the first chapter since I didn't think it would be super interesting lolol ;-; But tbh now thinking back on it, I don't know how confusing it is for other people. I do currently use Grammarly to catch mistakes, but usually, I tend to go for a more wordy way of describing thing ahahahah. I think it's honestly because I used to write historical romance a lot, so it's just become like my token of writing now ;-;