Not a shameless author here. It's probably very early for a review but since I have nothing to do, I might as well write this. Also, I want to make things clear. If you go into "see who voted" and see my profile, understand that it's not that I'm shameless. I was scrolling down my novel page in admiration for my work when a guy voted, I got too excited and pressed the "vote". I know it's a minor issue but still. Coming to the novel, I like to think that it's flawless but as an author as well as a reader I know it's not. The writing being one of the biggest flaws (which I'm trying to improve). Regarding the world-building, I believe it's more or less okay. If it appears bad, then it can only be attributed my not-okay writing. Understanding reader's dissatisfaction with main characters, I made the MC. He isn't a Gary Stu but he will get the job done. There are several social norms I would talk about in a sarcastic way. They are not to be taken seriously. Everything else is subjective. You like it? Good. You don't like it? Not good but I understand.
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whta with this Racism tag?
Potential Spoiler: Not kind of racism you are thinking of but just know that the MC might put you off sometimes because he favors his own race and country but slowly he will let go of that.
so is this a harem novel?
Yup, this is a harem novel.
Ah so it means u will bring in cat girls and elves later but right now he doesn't like them. I thought it meant that out of nowhere u would come out and say that... BALCKS HAVE LARGER DICKS THAN WHITES Now that's what I call racism hmmph ರ╭╮ರ ಠ︵ಠ ಠಗಠ
lmaooooo
pride for your work is important, if you think it's good, then push it, vote for it, recommend it to people you know, that's the only way you'll get successful unless you're really lucky.
agreed. I wrote this a while back and it was my first time doing a self-review so I was probably trying not to come off as repulsive.
won't cap I've tried to read the novel but can't mc just make mi can't he just came to a world have system that can help him but he's reject almost everything I get he want to go back to his world but he just wasting the good things he's cautious I understand that but can't help but hate his ways
I think you are very early (chapter 3) in the story. He accepts quests way more than he rejects.
yup I was on chapter 4 but I'll continue to read hopefully I can't reach 100 chapters before I put a review
about harem tag is he going to sleep with every female he encounter or maximum 4 female ??? I am in chapter 34 and so far the mc is like have multiple personalities and why every character is aggressive and unfriendly??? . best of luck and thanks for efforts 👍🏼👍🏼
Some characters appeared aggressive because they are (Bianca, Alfred). Some have reason for their aggressiveness (Ruby). That's how it is. If you are worried about young master-like characters appearing, they won't. And yes, mc's behavior sometimes is weird. It has been addressed a few times in the story and there was a definite reason for that. Regarding the harem, I'm not sure. Like I'm positive that it would be a harem but didn't think about the specifics. All I can say is that romance would never be an important driving force of the story. Thanks for reading.
thanks for replying because I was afraid the harem well become the focal point of the story and in general harem is what through me of stories but your storyline is what keeping me from drifting
Yeah. At first, I didn't want to mention that "harem" would be a part of the story because I didn't want the readers to get the impression of "another generic cringe romance harem" but then again, I also don't want to see comments - "story good before harem, now bad because harem ruin". I wanted to make it clear what readers are getting into.
what is with all of the sudden jumps in the plot? He is walking then suddenly picking a fight with a model, who also happens to be a murderer? The goes home and plays a video game? These are happening so frequently I am ready every paragraph trying to figure out if the plot changed for some reason
I'll reply to your review.
Is there a comic version?
I wish.
