I like the premise of Save State. It gives room for a lot of experimenting with different Timelines. I have only read two chapters so far but I do enjoy the concept. Problems? Make sure to edit. Swear or don't. Character Design is flat for now. Very Dialogue heavy. Maybe I will read more later but Grammer mistakes are a pet peeve of mine.
EleAxis
Liked it!
LIKEEleAxis:Guess I'll revise later then. My first time writing. Sorry for the mistakes tho