totally lazy story, the author does not strive for anything. things just don't make sense. lazy author who simply made MC Op. I know that everyone needs to start from somewhere, but this is very bad. needs a lot of improvement. it's just another generic MC without imagination.
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I'm truly sorry about that
Please guide me to make my story better
For you help, first I need to know what your goal was for that story when you started
1: you kind of ruined "the gamer" The goal of this skill is evolution and improvement. even if he gets stronger, it will be a bit false and redundant since he achieved several things without any effort. 2: you could have just added the world of Bleach and give the MC all the lines, but without the knowledge, making him train and evolve throughout history, but you ruined it by giving everything away for free. you threw out a big part of the story. and don't even tell me about the fact that he has all the Bleach items.this is wrong on so many levels that it hurts. if you wanted all the swords, you should make his zampakuto have this ability. like shika: turns any sword (including shikai Bankai) with 80% of the power of the original. You can even expand to any blade weapon and copy the dog's spear. The Bankai of your sword may look like the gate of Babylon, only with the swords you copied with 100% power. Obviously this would cost a lot of reishi, but with all lineages, it would be easy to stay strong.
I'm using Google translator because I don't speak English.If you don't understand something let me know.
2: Despite slavery, being in the Rias peerage can be considered an advantage. Issei basically does all the work and you can start your harem with Rias and Akeno. Everyone in this group has some trauma and being a good person for these two girls already guarantees them koneko can be the cute sister and serve as an entrance to Kuroka's heart. I'm not even going to talk about saving Yasaka's daughter and getting a milf fox. Of course, you can't make the girls fall into the MC's lap after a single chapter.It takes about 3 chapters for each girl along with some Skip team and some meetings to work. You can make the future peerage of the MC be composed only by his harem. You can easily include Bleach characters in the harem. The orihime only likes Ichigo because he was there when she was alone and needed help. There's a lot you can do, just think more.
Thank you very much for the guide
I can't remake the chapter from before but thanks to you, I can improved it on next chapter
