webnovel
Mastarius
MastariusLv21yr
2023-11-18 10:05

Quality of work see below... but hey it's free fanfic...

Liked it!

LIKE
empty img

No replies. Be the first!

Other Reviews
Enigmation
EnigmationLv4

Reviewed as of chp 15ish: TLDR; Needs a lot of work to even be mediocre. Went into it with low expectations, still dissatisfied. Though this story is basically author freeballing it so not expecting much improvement, perhaps in his future works he might. WQ(2/5) - Not good. At least it's somewhat readable but the lack of proper grammar, usage of commas and misspellings do not help the technical side. The writing itself is pretty flat, more of a summary or description rather than actual storytelling. SD(2/5) - Basically follows cannon events in the prequel with MC just following along till he gets bored. His wishes basically made him the strongest being in existence thus there's no real suspense, worse yet is the fact there isn't any meaningful build up. I feel like there wasn't any plan or storyboard going into the creation process of this story, making it just seem very janky and jaring. CD(2/5) - Legitimately the dialogue just kills this for me. There isn't any monologue or exposition from the MC. We basically don't have a narrator(not even an unreliable one)just an event explainer. Due to this, we don't really understand who the characters truly are. And God help anyone trying to understand the MC's motivation and whatnot. US(2/5) - Inconsistent and after a year only 30+ chps. Make of that what you will. WB(2/5) - The world could have been expanded and explored. Possibly adding a mystical aspect to the plague that granted Alexander his immortality. Unfortunately, we don't get much in terms of world building.

Related Stories

Marvel in Between Flesh and Steel.

In an surprising turn of events, Alex wakes up in the Marvel Universe(AU), problem is he had limited knowledge about Marvel. He only know some of the well known heroes, villains and lurking dimensional gods. He did his best to adjusts to this new reality, though not a genius like Ironman, he decides to adapt to this reality by starting a tech company he called Arasaka, hoping to strike it rich. During his undertaking, Alex finally gotten his wish, a half arse Golden Finger. That gave him advanced knowledge about technology, including cyberware, futuristic vehicles and weapons from games and movies like Skynet from Terminator. Empowered with this newfound knowledge, he transforms into a tech-enhanced superhero Navigating the challenges of the Marvel Universe. Authors Note: The Technology he will mostly use are from Terminator, Predator, Cyberpunk. I’ll add more as the story goes. There will be no Harem. I’ll try not to write romances as well so no Smut. I’ll have the main character focus in technology, sorry no magic. MC will appear as he has limited knowledge about the marvel verse. MC only knows about MCU, Spider-man Cartoons and Movies. A few clips he have watched from his previous life like Dare Devil. FAQ: 1) Is this business focus: No its not, There will be parts but not much. 2) There is a chance for romance depends on how the story goes. Note: I don’t know how to write stories. Believe me I tried. I’m just glad that I am able to accomplish one of my bucket list with the help of ChatGPT. Please be gentle lol. I know its gonna be bad, as again I don't know how to write in English and its not my native language. Its not even my secondary language, its not even the third since we have lots of languages, where I’m from. Any helpful criticism will be greatly appreciated. I'm just doing this for fun and hopefully when I actually try to write another story, it will be better.

Ashinydecapod · Movies
3.6
102 Chs