Review Detail of Etiger789 in Waifu Gacha System (On Hold)
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I know me not giving a 5 star review will confuse you but your novel ain't perfect. It's a good read but not perfect. Writing quality is 3 stars. It's to fast pace and you use no paragraphs so it's hard to read. Update stability is 5 stars. Story development is 3 stars. Again these women fall in love with him waaaaaaay to quickly. His mother, albedo and maybe tsunade I get but the rest is way to fast. The battle and mana system is bad and confusing as hell. And is Death throwing away her fucking divinity a normal thing. You would think the other gods would panic or find the situation strange and investigate. Charachter design is 4 stars. I would have done 3 but I love Adam from Ragnorak to much to do that. His personality on the other hand... World background is 3 stars. All I know is that rape is illegal and anyone who does it or even attempts it can be killed on sight. And nobody bats an eye. And thay beast man are rasist to humans. Let's see if the Authur deletes my review to keep his 5 star rating or takes the criticism to heart.
Waifu Gacha System (On Hold)
BillNyeThePGGuy
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Nah it's cool bro, most of your complaints are valid. This is my first attempt at a novel so far, but I'd like to defend a few things: 1. I think I've improved with my paragraphs lately, I've found the enter key so the paragraphs aren't as long as it used to be. 2. The reason the girls fall for him so fast is because of his 'Perfect Human' Passive ability. (Although thats basically just an excuse) 3. Lady Death hadn't been seen or talked to for many centuries, only teleporting to corpses to report them. I'm fairly certain any woman would gladly throw their power away for a man like that. (The only reason she was able to be seen is because she was summoned through the system) 4. I changed the personality a bit because his personality was slightly naíve for my liking although I'd get a better idea of his view towards disgusting humans if he met Jack the Ripper. But the way I saw him, he was someone that wanted the best for humanity as a whole and may have hesitated in killing. 5. Yeah my world building was bad. I suppose I didn't sort it out as good as I'd like to think. Anyway, thank you for reading and your feedback. Any negative and constructive reviews will not be deleted. I understand that this novel isn't for everyone.
Even if you don't care I wanted to add another thing. There are about 5 or so women that are being introduced into the story that will not instantly fall for the MC. 2 already have been, being Tsunade and Yumeko. I just wanted to add that I'm trying to make the women harder to get but the yanderes fall fast and the rest have a good reason for being on love with Adam so fast. Anyway, carry on.
Mate, you've been reading to much fantasy lately "I'm fairly certain any woman would gladly throw their power away for a man like that." That is completely wrong, in fact I'm fairly certain they would rather keep their powers. Unless of course that woman is horribly infatuated with zed person, and if that's the case they need some serious help instead of throwing away their powers. Because if it turns out that the person they feel in love with is nothing like they thought, imagine the possible backlash that girl may face. Although if the girl is stupidly naive and stupidly OP at the same time it may be possible.
BillNyeThePGGuy:Nah it's cool bro, most of your complaints are valid. This is my first attempt at a novel so far, but I'd like to defend a few things: 1. I think I've improved with my paragraphs lately, I've found the enter key so the paragraphs aren't as long as it used to be. 2. The reason the girls fall for him so fast is because of his 'Perfect Human' Passive ability. (Although thats basically just an excuse) 3. Lady Death hadn't been seen or talked to for many centuries, only teleporting to corpses to report them. I'm fairly certain any woman would gladly throw their power away for a man like that. (The only reason she was able to be seen is because she was summoned through the system) 4. I changed the personality a bit because his personality was slightly naíve for my liking although I'd get a better idea of his view towards disgusting humans if he met Jack the Ripper. But the way I saw him, he was someone that wanted the best for humanity as a whole and may have hesitated in killing. 5. Yeah my world building was bad. I suppose I didn't sort it out as good as I'd like to think. Anyway, thank you for reading and your feedback. Any negative and constructive reviews will not be deleted. I understand that this novel isn't for everyone.
Frox_Crox:Mate, you've been reading to much fantasy lately "I'm fairly certain any woman would gladly throw their power away for a man like that." That is completely wrong, in fact I'm fairly certain they would rather keep their powers. Unless of course that woman is horribly infatuated with zed person, and if that's the case they need some serious help instead of throwing away their powers. Because if it turns out that the person they feel in love with is nothing like they thought, imagine the possible backlash that girl may face. Although if the girl is stupidly naive and stupidly OP at the same time it may be possible.