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CrystallizedChaos
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2021-11-19 20:23

The writing quality is good, great for this sites standards, and there's nothing to complain about with the stability of updates either, I think. Honestly, the world is really interesting and I enjoy how it's all been handled. You made me want to learn more about the world and the schemes that are happening underneath, because it really feels like a world that's planned out and real instead of just randomly added things to suit the plot, but I just can't. After reading generic OP MC No. 426, I understand not liking wish-fullfilment where the MC gets everything handed to them for no reason other than they're the MC, but this is ridiculous. Over and over and over, when you think something good is finally going to happen, it once again turns into something dramatic and depressing, and it apparently stays this way until at least chapter 80, so I can't bring myself to keep reading. All I got from this was a bad mood, and it's because there's no payoff. Multiple bad things happen, and you're feeling bad for the characters, it looks like something is finally going to turn out good, only for it to somehow escalate into another depressing problem that's even worse than it used to be, especially with Ash. You really should add some tragedy and grimdark tags, because I came here looking for some wish-fullfilment isekai novel

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If you came here for a JP-like fluffy, comedy, slice-of-life novel about a random dude living with a hot elf, then look no further, cause that's exactly what you'll get....... for a couple of chapters - and then it'll go all in on grim-dark despair. Overall, Elf-story (shortform for this novel's long ass title), is really well written. It has good humor, narration, exposition, pacing, witty dialogue, and multi-dimensional characters with fleshed out backgrounds. So, all's well that ends well? Unfortunately, and this is my personal opinion, the story just got too dark too quickly - and theres too much of it without any sunshine (read:fluff/romance/light heartedness/happy moments/etc). This, combined with a beta, spineless, and indecisive MC (who we never get to know the name of), simply began to annoy me more and more. I came here for a fluffy elf-chan comedy story, then I was pleasantly surprised with deeper and darker plot, but then it became tedious reading about a never evolving relationship, pitifully spineless MC, and constant dark-upon-dark developments, where the story is going from one crisis to another. I hope that in the future plot can include some more romance, where Ash (elf-chan) and MC kiss, make up, do gf+bf stuff - and no, don't tear them apart with some stupid deus-ex machina plot machinations the next chapter to prove their love or some other random bullshit reasoning. Keep them together, and have them develop together for the fluff in the dark. In short, fluff is good, but lately too much dark and crisis combined with a constantly spineless MC is becoming tedious to read.

Gehirn_Dabraine
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Slightly confused at what im reading. Im at chapter 205 and literally the world building of this novel leaves much to desire. The premise of the book definitely starts off on a high note but at some point as a reader you literally say aloud “wtf is going on?!”. Theres no foreshadowing to speak of, the mc deviates between natural speech to prim and proper “ye old english” with bits of slang thrown in here and there and to cap it all of… the MC Is the stereotypical beta character who is 90% of his time thinking self deprecating thoughts but “some how” will pull the occasional confidence out nowhere. I find myself asking myself is he weak, irresponsible, secretly clever or just dense. i understand the mechanics of how a flawed character should behave as there are plenty of light novels that have this character motif of weak to strong (i.e second coming of Gluttony, Devils Son in Law, etc) but this MC leaves me literally flabbergasted. Its not a bad novel per se but i feel the MC is tryibg hard at being something he isnt. Eventually i will come back to this book perhaps but for me personally i just think unless you can deal with a typical beta MC who maybe through some past life act of valor (saving a universe, stopping Thanos’s snap, or defeating truck-kun) somehow ended up in a harem but not a harem (as some of the characters are plainly disrespectful or love him for absolutely no reason that can be found at all) that maybe this book isnt for you. Apologies to the author if this criticism is too harsh but im actually trying to temain objective about the failing points while remaining polite. TYVM.

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