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borqueh
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Hello, I will try to make my review as professional as possible. I will first start with the world background of the story. In my opinion, the history of the world is a 10/10, the originality and development on the part of the author is incredible. I don't know how to explain it to you but I can assure you (reader) that you will love it, one way or another. xd Second, the development of the story. I honestly don't like the fact that you put too much padding in the first chapters and others, I've been watching it and apparently you do roughly 2,000-3,000 words, that's fine, but in my opinion it's a bit annoying that the chapter is like 75% fill and 25% the "objective" of the chapter. Third, I would have liked you to start by already explaining the history of what happened on planet Earth, since the moment you explain it and the readers read it and are interested in it, it is as if you were the fisherman and the readers fish. You quickly grab their attention and keep them reading your story. When I read the first chapter, I honestly didn't mind at all, but decided to give it a try and read up to chapter 3, which surprisingly caught my eye. Fourth, I don't know what else to say, I just like the story, but I try to stop completing and move on to the objective. Well that's good, keep uploading chapters that I know will go far, bye. PS: If you have time, can you comment on your own review of my novel? It's called "The Shadow System", now yes, bye.

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My Chaos System

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I liked your input and will give it a look over. I haven’t gone back to fix some of my fluff and make it nice. Since i started it i didn’t expect it to take off like it did. But with everything now, I may go back and adjust the first chapter to put more history of the worlds of chaos. But only enough to satify that curious itch for more. I am actually currently working on popping up the questions of how far back did these worlds exist and mix with the world. So do keep reading as more questions and answers will come.