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2021-02-26 16:30

Okay, where to start? Firstly, I really enjoyed reading this. It is fast paced, action packed, chilling at times, and I really like how the author focuses in on little details to give emphasis to a scene or emotions. I think the story had good worldbuilding elements too, the prologue itself was great for setting out expectations of what is to come in the story. That said, there are a few things I would like to see for ease of reading. Better grammar, ending sentences and using speech marks would really help direct the flow of the novel. I would also maybe like to see some parts of the novel given more dramatic emphasis to really make certain parts of the book stand out. That is not to say I didnt enjoy reading, because I had a blast delving into the chapters. But if I were to give it five stars, those are some changes I would make. Keep up the great work!

Origins (By X-Writer)

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Thanks for reading and also for your feedback, I would take all you have said into account and try to improve on my writing.

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Hey, check out the book and see if you like it...if you don't I understand and I am sorry it could not meet your needs However, leave a comment though regardless if you enjoyed or not, this would help me improve. Thanks😅

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Mel_Aniv
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This story is lit! With a talented author, this novel was in good hands. I gotta say I'm impressed! Accompanied with hard work and perseverance, this will pave well in the future! Good luck author and may your novel be blessed with more readers!

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Dave_Tinsley
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It's an interesting story and the characters are intriguing, i would love to know more about them. The style of writing is pretty cool. Can't wait for the next chapter

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Hey author, good day for writing! We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email amanda_nl21@*hotmail.com (delete *) for details.

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