if you ask about this story .. then i will describe it in one word: messy. try to imagine you want to make juice with various kinds of fruit in one glass ... yuck .. and like that .. introduce a lot of characters and story setting which is good, but in bad time because it just piles up all the beginning, the plot sticks with time that's right .. hopefully fixes it .. and one question ... how do you continue the story with lots of opening plots ..? NB: PLOT HOLE CAN SAFE YOU
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