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RazorIsSharp
RazorIsSharpLv24yr
2020-11-10 02:39

I like how this story started, but I feel like it could use a little more description between some of the dialog. For instance, when he starts fighting Mr. Thai, I'm not quite sure where he is. Anyways, keep up the hard work! More chapters!

The Black Tome

AxlesOfFate
4.8
29 Chs

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RazorIsSharp
RazorIsSharpLv2

Update as of chapter 6: It has really strong dialog, it just needs a little more details to introduce the scenes and the scenery! Thanks so much author!

4yr
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KikiCreative
KikiCreativeLv1

I love this! I think im addicted! You did a FANTASTIC job! Don't stop! I would highly recommend people read this! and I can't believe I became a simp so fast it's ridiculous

4yr

Kystal88
Kystal88Lv2

Storytelling is gripping, and you're automatically siding from the first chapter with MC. Clear determination of who is speaking, without confusion. Easy to read sentences, spelling and grammar are well done. Good job author!

4yr
augustwrites
augustwritesLv1

The story just flows. The writing is very clear and easy to read. A bit dialogue heavy, but I actually prefer that. Pacing is great and you don't get bogged down with descriptions as you would in other fantasy stories. Looking forward to next installments.

4yr
Alpha_Medic
Alpha_MedicLv2

KEEP IT UP! You've got serious literary capabilities, Author, and they shine through your meticulous wordplay and descriptive efforts. The pacing can stand for a bit of improvement, as at some times I skipped an entire paragraph or two in order to keep invested. In general, however, I think you're doing an amazing job, and I look forward to your further work. 10/10, Author!

4yr
sharrnister
sharrnisterLv2

Hi Author! Overall, your story is very interesting and I liked how you describe their world background and your writing quality is so good! The character design is one of them who you create so well, Good job so far!

4yr
Bao_Karen
Bao_KarenLv13

I think it is overall pretty good but I think you need to add a bit more detail to your characters, so the reader can get a better understanding of how the characters look.

4yr
The_Procrastinator
The_ProcrastinatorLv12

Reveal spoiler

4yr
AxlesOfFate
AxlesOfFateAuthor

Shameless self-review here enjoying the entire writing process and am happy that I am getting so many positive things said about my writing thank you everyone for the time you have spent with my novel. Everything makes a difference. Every read. Every power vote. Every Collection. Every Review. Every Comment. Thank you everyone again and again.

4yr
Bishtf
BishtfLv2

I really like this book! I'm a sucker for adventure and fantasy books and this one suites my tastes. The first 11 chapters have been so interesting. Am looking forward for the next updates!

4yr
Aella_Stormwind
Aella_StormwindLv13

Really enjoying this story so far. Your writing style is well developed, and your main character is unique and not archetypical. Interesting concept, excited to see where this goes! Keep up the good work.

4yr
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