Review Detail of RJMidnight in What?! The gamemaster and the top player are dating?! [BL]

I love BL, so that automatically pulled me into the story. The story is interesting and your wordbuilding and pacing is good; keep up with the pace you are at. You have a few grammar mistakes with punctuations and capitalization; easily fixable when you go back and reread it. And maybe break up some of your long paragraphs. Keep up the good work!