I don’t like romance nor female lead, although it seems you have male lead too (unless I read that wrong). Your story has potential and interesting, especially since you have a mystery aspect to it. The mystery is what brings people into the story. You have grammar mistakes, especially a lot of places that need commas. Remember, commas make a difference and the story flow better. Without the commas, it is like everything is together. Other than that, your story has potential, keep up the good work!
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