Review Detail of Manav_Dev_Singh in The False Hero (Book 1 of the Semisaur Chronicles)

The story is definitely encapsulating. The pace is slow enough to get into, and the twist at the end is well placed. The blue bird which I'm sure is a dinosaur is a nice inclusion as well. But now I'd like to talk about the lackings. The dialogues do not seem very organic, in which I mean to say that the way in which some of the kids are talking isn't at all how kids talk. For example at the point where the two kids keep calling each other idiots, the writer uses the word "you are". Talking is supposed to flow smoothly of one's mouths especially when the talkers are kids rather than literature teachers from Harvard. So I'd think they would say their lines smoothly like - "Shut up BRO, you're an idiot!" "Oh yeah?! You're the bigger one! Also I noticed the lack of synonyms. So maybe consider using Thesaurus when you write the next chapter. My overall verdict is that the story and pacing is good, but there are a few grammar errors that are a bit too hard to overlook once noticed.