You’re world-building is amazing, it really gives me a picture of what kind of world you are building. Your story is interesting with a good pace that is seems like it is fast, but in reality, it is not. I also like that you give translations on what some people would be confused on. I enjoy when authors give translations(whether it is for language, phrases/sayings, or something they made up). You do have grammar mistakes in the way some words are worded and punctuation problems. But it does not take from the story at all. Keep up the good work!
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