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2021-02-09 01:17

The amount of filler for the past 15 chapters is what annoys me about this story. I understad you are trying to show the mothers backstory and how the parents met and under what circumstances, but come on. 15 chapters could be condensed. I might star reading if its over but im more interested in the MC and ML than i am about the parents, no matter how much they pertain to the story developement.

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