Review Detail of in Aerdrin: The Lost Heir of The Sky

A few grammatical and semantic comments about the Synopsis. My aim is to inform and not to criticize. "The time will come for the past of the future to converge." It is said that "multiple" things converge. But here, there is a single element: 'the past of the future'. Depending on the meaning, 'the past and the future to converge' would be more appropriate. "And those which you always deny". This doesn't sound right. "those" is used as a pronoun here, but it needs an antecedent, that does not appear here, thus it makes no sense. You usually deny something, not a person. "The people whose existence you deny, shall surely emerge", would be better. "Wheel of the world will be put to rest". I know it is a metaphor but it doesn't sound right. 'The wheel of the World will stop spinning.' Would sound more natural. "Sapiens deserve no more of the mother earth". I suppose you mean 'to no greater extent'. In this case, you need to say "no more [than] sth/sby" Here would be a few correct alternatives: "Sapiens no longer deserve anything our Mother Earth has to offer" "Sapiens no longer deserve our Mother Earth" "Sapiens do not deserve our mother Earth any more" Note that Mother Earth is capitalized. "For what good of a faith that has been spitted to dirt." > 'What good of' is not a correct collocation. > One can say 'What good is', 'What good does', 'What good would'... So I propose: "What good is there in a faith that has been spitted on?" As for the last two lines of the Speech, this is just a personal opinion but I think it is unclear whether the 'not' denies that 'He' heard the 'cries' (the intended meaning), or whether 'every corner of the sky' do not hear 'Him': So I propose: "But He who had severed the ties Heard nothing but seven billion lies"