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2021-08-18 20:43

Huh. Why is the mc so talkative? I mean she's constantly bubbling about everything even the way she moves. Duh πŸ˜’ Excuse me, but I really wanted to say this. I find the narration annoying. Author, I think if you're going to put too much description into everything then change it into a third pov than first pov. Cuz the way the mc's rumbling is annoying. Seriously.

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