Review Detail of Lucien121 in Parallel Trials of a Somewhat Hero
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it was a ok story but all the suffixes just ruin it like before yall call me a hater i watch english sub not dub but this is english language ok and it makes since in jappanese but this is english is annoying to read and honestly this novel would be way better without it ok but thats not the only reason why i scored it like this is the suffixes litterly if a story has to have multiple pages of definitions every single chapter just so the reader can simi understand what there saying then yea no but overall its a decent novel but rhe suffixes and random jappanese is annoying to read with the English
Parallel Trials of a Somewhat Hero
SarushiroEruma
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cool man. I really appreciate the time and effort for giving this feedback. thanks! I'll work on it[img=recommend]
Lucien121:i mean thats really about it i think it was just hard to follow and again i watch sub anime for readers who dont i worry for them when they read this lol but i did get an anime like feel from this so that was good idk kinda had a chilvery of a failed knight kinda vibe like power wise not the story tho the flashbacks added in it seemed to take up alot flash backs arent bad but it seemed excessive and to get the general idea of a flash back that took up most the chapter it couldve been summed up in a good paragragh or two tho the time pireod is also kinda hard to follow along with the technological stage their at like anime they watch so they have some sort of watching device and well its anime and its a class of 2022 i believe so its mordern day but from the beggining i got kinda around mid evil with alot of game logic out of it but later develops into modern day it kinda threw me off personally with the mixture it was like a fast developed multi idea thrown together but i mean it wasnt bad by far i mean i still gave it 4.2 but the story gets irrelevant when its hard to annoying to read even if you like the story and heres really something unimportant really but might help alittle the mc had a really long and complicated name which is fine but is hard to say as well as im sure its a hastle to spell alot and i liked how he had a shortened verson i think idk saiki or was it sieki for him and the download system seems idk off to me i get it its futuristic but before i fully realized that i thought it was just apart of a system kinda rpg game novel but the process seems alot to take in and from what ive read theres no real like baises of power i guess you can say like point system that tells you how much "mana" ill say you have to cast spells idk but after awhile i got the hang of it but maybe a simpler system set up
i mean thats really about it i think it was just hard to follow and again i watch sub anime for readers who dont i worry for them when they read this lol but i did get an anime like feel from this so that was good idk kinda had a chilvery of a failed knight kinda vibe like power wise not the story tho the flashbacks added in it seemed to take up alot flash backs arent bad but it seemed excessive and to get the general idea of a flash back that took up most the chapter it couldve been summed up in a good paragragh or two tho the time pireod is also kinda hard to follow along with the technological stage their at like anime they watch so they have some sort of watching device and well its anime and its a class of 2022 i believe so its mordern day but from the beggining i got kinda around mid evil with alot of game logic out of it but later develops into modern day it kinda threw me off personally with the mixture it was like a fast developed multi idea thrown together but i mean it wasnt bad by far i mean i still gave it 4.2 but the story gets irrelevant when its hard to annoying to read even if you like the story and heres really something unimportant really but might help alittle the mc had a really long and complicated name which is fine but is hard to say as well as im sure its a hastle to spell alot and i liked how he had a shortened verson i think idk saiki or was it sieki for him and the download system seems idk off to me i get it its futuristic but before i fully realized that i thought it was just apart of a system kinda rpg game novel but the process seems alot to take in and from what ive read theres no real like baises of power i guess you can say like point system that tells you how much "mana" ill say you have to cast spells idk but after awhile i got the hang of it but maybe a simpler system set up
SarushiroEruma:thank you for the honest review. I actually really appreciate these kinds of feedback, so I can further improve my work. let me know if you still have something else in mind. I'll try my best to address some issues right away[img=recommend]
SarushiroEruma:cool man. I really appreciate the time and effort for giving this feedback. thanks! I'll work on it[img=recommend]
oh no need to say sorry man! good long and honest feedback is what I think I need since I'm just starting to upload my novel. this gives me a really good chance to improve my writingđ
Lucien121:no problem sorry i wrote longer than i thought