Review Detail of Saeven07 in A Cinderella story - Untold files -

Six chapters in and I do like how the setting was described. The ball's glamour was easy to picture with how you write it. The construction of the sentences were alright although there were a few grammatical errors here and there, a mistake everyone has and could be easily edited. How the story's being told is a bit interesting, though, as the MC talks to the narrator a lot. So I'm a bit confused if the narrator is also a character of the story? There are styles like that, as I've read some, but if it is for a novel I think you should have said so beforehand. If it is not really a part of it and you want the main character to throw side comments as she goes along with what she's experiencing, considering first person POV might work. So far, this is all that I've observed. I do hope you'll continue writing and developing your craft. Cheers to you!