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2021-08-31 00:40

It's a lovely and interesting story. It revolves around the life of a teen in her little adventure in an unfamiliar society. The characterization was good, and the characters are cute and lovable. The story development was paced just fine and wasn't that confusing. It's also very easy to read. I just think that it could be better with adding more details to descriptions and especially during conversations. There's a little work to do with the grammatical errors and misuse o punctuation marks. But the story's comprehensible enough to understand what's going on with the story. Overall it was good!

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thank you so much,I will work extra hard to try and improve on my grammar and punctuation😁.I will also try being more descriptive. I'm really grateful that you took time out of your day to write this review ❤.I'm also glad you enjoyed my little story 🤗

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You're welcome! I wish you the best of luck Author-ssi!

Hellohworldd:thank you so much,I will work extra hard to try and improve on my grammar and punctuation😁.I will also try being more descriptive. I'm really grateful that you took time out of your day to write this review ❤.I'm also glad you enjoyed my little story 🤗
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