Review Detail of ArtoriaPendragon_ in Thomas Prest: A Simple Magician
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It’s a horrible crossover between DxD and MCU with mutants. Some people were defending this, but it brings a h*ll of a lot of problems. First: Plot holes, the author is going to have to completely change the Norse pantheon for it to even work. He’s going to have to explain why the ancient one hasn’t been involved. He’s going to have to explain whether or not mutants as devils is a thing. He’s going to have to explain if higher ups (like Fury) know of devils (which realistically he would). He going to have to completely change the Egyptian Pantheon due to moon knight. He’s going to have to explain Thor and Loki more. He’s going to have to explain if Ophis and Great Red even know of the outside universe (which they should). He’s also going to have to explain wth the dimensional gap is, and how someone like Dormammu hasn’t just killed Great red and taken it. 2nd: The timeline is now a clusterf*ck, he’s going to have to completely reorganize some events for them to make even the littlest bit of sense. 3rd: He’s going to have to explain how no one has ever found out about Devils, even with the technology they have. As there’s no way there isn’t a mistake here or there. Overall, this fsnfic is doomed to fail. And considering the MC in Naruto and how r*tarted he was, I don’t have much to any hope in this fsnfic.
Thomas Prest: A Simple Magician
KasiCair
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I’m not that mad about it, just annoyed over the fact that the author thought it would be a good idea to do this without warning.
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Yes, but you can’t just mash them together with no warning. The main character didn’t interact with any character from the MCU until like chapter 20 which is quite late to do such a thing.
ReadsforFun:....but isn't this exactly what fanfic is all about? that you have free rein over how and when you all mash it togehter?
But yeah, the chances of this fanfic working is pretty slim. You gotta have the writing skills of someone like the creator of Grandpa Universe (He’s one of the best fanfic writers on this site by far). And this author, just from his other works, certainly isn’t that good.
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So, to summarize this, I am a trash writer who should not try to challenge himself and simply do some canon rehashes because trying to make something new is a bad thing. Is that what you wanted to convey? So... a guy with multiple story attempts who could not even write one proper story with more than 10 chapters since all of your works are either dropped or on indefinite hiatus is judging me because he doesn't like my work? Look, I can take critique and I am fine if somebody doesn't like my work. I never said this is gonna be the best fanfic out there. But you did not state even one reason why you don't like the story NOW. You only stated what you assume will happen 'in the future' and that it will be bad because I am a trash writer and you put it in such a way as if your opinion is holier than Jesus. I have no idea what to tell you about this. I am actually disappointed, rather than angry.
And just so we are clear, your concerns are valid. There will be many things that won't mesh easily in these worlds but I am counting on it and this is supposed to be as a challenge for me. But apparently trying is the synonym of being trash on this site.
KasiCair:So, to summarize this, I am a trash writer who should not try to challenge himself and simply do some canon rehashes because trying to make something new is a bad thing. Is that what you wanted to convey? So... a guy with multiple story attempts who could not even write one proper story with more than 10 chapters since all of your works are either dropped or on indefinite hiatus is judging me because he doesn't like my work? Look, I can take critique and I am fine if somebody doesn't like my work. I never said this is gonna be the best fanfic out there. But you did not state even one reason why you don't like the story NOW. You only stated what you assume will happen 'in the future' and that it will be bad because I am a trash writer and you put it in such a way as if your opinion is holier than Jesus. I have no idea what to tell you about this. I am actually disappointed, rather than angry.
I don’t like the story now for various reasons but here are a few: You added a crossover with zero warning, and didn’t have the mc interact with any of the MCU characters atleast once before like chapter 20. I would have been more okay with this crossover if there was a warning in the synopsis, and if you had him interact with them earlier on. I also just don’t like the pace of the story, it’s incredibly slow (like 2-3 chapters for one conversation slow). The fact that you had to bring up Devils bring cucks was a huge turn off. As while it didn’t effect the reader, It still gives that feeling of anxiety. I basically have PTSD form mc’s suddenly turning into cucks. The fact that this was explained over 2 entire chapters was also a huge turnoff. It was more disgusting then anything. And while I don’t have much against the MC, he just seems kind of…boring? Not sure if that’s how you word it, but I hope he’ll become a stronger and more likeable character. I apologize for being rude, as I guess I either had a bad day, or I was being a d*ckhead for no reason😂
KasiCair:So, to summarize this, I am a trash writer who should not try to challenge himself and simply do some canon rehashes because trying to make something new is a bad thing. Is that what you wanted to convey? So... a guy with multiple story attempts who could not even write one proper story with more than 10 chapters since all of your works are either dropped or on indefinite hiatus is judging me because he doesn't like my work? Look, I can take critique and I am fine if somebody doesn't like my work. I never said this is gonna be the best fanfic out there. But you did not state even one reason why you don't like the story NOW. You only stated what you assume will happen 'in the future' and that it will be bad because I am a trash writer and you put it in such a way as if your opinion is holier than Jesus. I have no idea what to tell you about this. I am actually disappointed, rather than angry.
It’s not the trying part that made me not have much confidence. It was the universes you decided to mesh, and how late you decided to do it. MCU can be an incredibly complex multiverse when you really look into it. While DxD…just doesn’t really fit? I feel like a universe like Harry Potter or even Supernatural could have been a better crossover. But in the end, it’s up to you as the author.
KasiCair:And just so we are clear, your concerns are valid. There will be many things that won't mesh easily in these worlds but I am counting on it and this is supposed to be as a challenge for me. But apparently trying is the synonym of being trash on this site.
If you put this into your review, I would have been totally fine with it. These are your reasons for why you dislike the story as it is now and that's fair enough. Tbh, I plan to make multi-crossover and even some dimensional travel later on so if one crossover is a problem for you, then this most likely simply isn't the story for you. But the second this became a crossover, for me personally, that means this is not the MCU canon universe. There will be some things changed, some things completely omitted, and I won't have time to spend so much time on the MCU part anyway. Whether someone likes that or not... that's sadly not my priority. I just write what I want to write.
ArtoriaPendragon_:I don’t like the story now for various reasons but here are a few: You added a crossover with zero warning, and didn’t have the mc interact with any of the MCU characters atleast once before like chapter 20. I would have been more okay with this crossover if there was a warning in the synopsis, and if you had him interact with them earlier on. I also just don’t like the pace of the story, it’s incredibly slow (like 2-3 chapters for one conversation slow). The fact that you had to bring up Devils bring cucks was a huge turn off. As while it didn’t effect the reader, It still gives that feeling of anxiety. I basically have PTSD form mc’s suddenly turning into cucks. The fact that this was explained over 2 entire chapters was also a huge turnoff. It was more disgusting then anything. And while I don’t have much against the MC, he just seems kind of…boring? Not sure if that’s how you word it, but I hope he’ll become a stronger and more likeable character. I apologize for being rude, as I guess I either had a bad day, or I was being a d*ckhead for no reason😂
That’s alright. I sort of realized this wouldn’t be for me after you introduce the MCU. But I wish you luck!
KasiCair:If you put this into your review, I would have been totally fine with it. These are your reasons for why you dislike the story as it is now and that's fair enough. Tbh, I plan to make multi-crossover and even some dimensional travel later on so if one crossover is a problem for you, then this most likely simply isn't the story for you. But the second this became a crossover, for me personally, that means this is not the MCU canon universe. There will be some things changed, some things completely omitted, and I won't have time to spend so much time on the MCU part anyway. Whether someone likes that or not... that's sadly not my priority. I just write what I want to write.
Oh! Did you add dimensional travel to this story? Sounds interesting. If that's true, I have a some doubts about this.. Is he just going to stay in the Marvel Crossover universe, I mean, in the dimensions that exist in that universe, or is he actually taking dimensional trips to various stories.. I'm looking forward to the development of this story btw, considering the previous story you wrote was awesome.
KasiCair:If you put this into your review, I would have been totally fine with it. These are your reasons for why you dislike the story as it is now and that's fair enough. Tbh, I plan to make multi-crossover and even some dimensional travel later on so if one crossover is a problem for you, then this most likely simply isn't the story for you. But the second this became a crossover, for me personally, that means this is not the MCU canon universe. There will be some things changed, some things completely omitted, and I won't have time to spend so much time on the MCU part anyway. Whether someone likes that or not... that's sadly not my priority. I just write what I want to write.
yo creo que 20 cap para que el mc sepa que es un crossover es muy poco, porque incluso he leido fanfic que ya hay mas 90 cap y todavia el mc no sabe que es un crossover
ArtoriaPendragon_:I don’t like the story now for various reasons but here are a few: You added a crossover with zero warning, and didn’t have the mc interact with any of the MCU characters atleast once before like chapter 20. I would have been more okay with this crossover if there was a warning in the synopsis, and if you had him interact with them earlier on. I also just don’t like the pace of the story, it’s incredibly slow (like 2-3 chapters for one conversation slow). The fact that you had to bring up Devils bring cucks was a huge turn off. As while it didn’t effect the reader, It still gives that feeling of anxiety. I basically have PTSD form mc’s suddenly turning into cucks. The fact that this was explained over 2 entire chapters was also a huge turnoff. It was more disgusting then anything. And while I don’t have much against the MC, he just seems kind of…boring? Not sure if that’s how you word it, but I hope he’ll become a stronger and more likeable character. I apologize for being rude, as I guess I either had a bad day, or I was being a d*ckhead for no reason😂
so you adding dimensional hopping, hoping mc can go to the aot world idk in another fanfic if you make another or this one if possible
KasiCair:If you put this into your review, I would have been totally fine with it. These are your reasons for why you dislike the story as it is now and that's fair enough. Tbh, I plan to make multi-crossover and even some dimensional travel later on so if one crossover is a problem for you, then this most likely simply isn't the story for you. But the second this became a crossover, for me personally, that means this is not the MCU canon universe. There will be some things changed, some things completely omitted, and I won't have time to spend so much time on the MCU part anyway. Whether someone likes that or not... that's sadly not my priority. I just write what I want to write.
KasiCair:And just so we are clear, your concerns are valid. There will be many things that won't mesh easily in these worlds but I am counting on it and this is supposed to be as a challenge for me. But apparently trying is the synonym of being trash on this site.
I don't see why the MC has to interact with a MCU character early into the story unless you meant having them interact early would tell us that it was a crossover. Besides that i do agree on the pacing being extremely slow. And let's be real about the devils... they're long lived so you'd expect some degenerates amongst some of them, I dont care as long as the MC isn't affected by it.
ArtoriaPendragon_:I don’t like the story now for various reasons but here are a few: You added a crossover with zero warning, and didn’t have the mc interact with any of the MCU characters atleast once before like chapter 20. I would have been more okay with this crossover if there was a warning in the synopsis, and if you had him interact with them earlier on. I also just don’t like the pace of the story, it’s incredibly slow (like 2-3 chapters for one conversation slow). The fact that you had to bring up Devils bring cucks was a huge turn off. As while it didn’t effect the reader, It still gives that feeling of anxiety. I basically have PTSD form mc’s suddenly turning into cucks. The fact that this was explained over 2 entire chapters was also a huge turnoff. It was more disgusting then anything. And while I don’t have much against the MC, he just seems kind of…boring? Not sure if that’s how you word it, but I hope he’ll become a stronger and more likeable character. I apologize for being rude, as I guess I either had a bad day, or I was being a d*ckhead for no reason😂
sabes, hay un solo cosa que literalmente destruye cualquier posible crosover con temática de magia, si se efectúa en el universo marver. y esta es que la magia en ese universo tiene un precio. Por así decirlo literal le da cancer a la mayoría de magos e incluso a matado a muchos practicantes. -_- ahora combina esa regla en la magia, que ojo no afecta a todos. como a los seguidores de entidades poderosas como wanda o a seres que tiene ese tipo de coneccion como el hechicero supremo.
ArtoriaPendragon_:That’s alright. I sort of realized this wouldn’t be for me after you introduce the MCU. But I wish you luck!
yeah, the reason so many people angry is because your World building and info dump is so good in the beginning and solid about dxd world, now we don't even get the main act on dxd world, but you just drop another mcu world info dump, no wonder people angry, we just get over the prologue and you just add other prologue..
KasiCair:If you put this into your review, I would have been totally fine with it. These are your reasons for why you dislike the story as it is now and that's fair enough. Tbh, I plan to make multi-crossover and even some dimensional travel later on so if one crossover is a problem for you, then this most likely simply isn't the story for you. But the second this became a crossover, for me personally, that means this is not the MCU canon universe. There will be some things changed, some things completely omitted, and I won't have time to spend so much time on the MCU part anyway. Whether someone likes that or not... that's sadly not my priority. I just write what I want to write.
what he mean is you gonna do LOTS OF EXPLAIN TO MAKE SENSE, what we usually said on novel "info dump". its not that we hate info dump, the fact that we read till mcu reveal with so many info dump about devil already say how interesting your info dump explanation, but when you force breed dxd and mcu what mutant-devil birth that need a lot of Info dump. i know you want to challenge yourself, but what you are doing also challenge the reader to read your info dump, so many people rage about it. its not just you that feel bad, but the reader also feel bad about info dump, thats why this crossover genre usually use high level fantasy world with low level fantasy, so there is no confusion and need info dump.
KasiCair:So, to summarize this, I am a trash writer who should not try to challenge himself and simply do some canon rehashes because trying to make something new is a bad thing. Is that what you wanted to convey? So... a guy with multiple story attempts who could not even write one proper story with more than 10 chapters since all of your works are either dropped or on indefinite hiatus is judging me because he doesn't like my work? Look, I can take critique and I am fine if somebody doesn't like my work. I never said this is gonna be the best fanfic out there. But you did not state even one reason why you don't like the story NOW. You only stated what you assume will happen 'in the future' and that it will be bad because I am a trash writer and you put it in such a way as if your opinion is holier than Jesus. I have no idea what to tell you about this. I am actually disappointed, rather than angry.
