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2020-11-03 02:23

Really gooood! I like the idea of the storyline. I can see that probably the inspiration was... a computer game ;) There are a few parts in your story that reminds me of the atmosphere of John Wyndams post-apocalyptic novel "Day of the Triffids". The science-fiction elements are ineteresting. Characters are expressive... All the best! Keep writing!

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Thank you so much for taking the time to read!! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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