Review Detail of DaoistSuperMate in Skotadi
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A guy created a guy using imagination then he somehow receives very op powers cuz imagination??? Though author tried to explain the crestions backstory so he wasnt just imagination?? (I did not understand what you want ur character to be. One moment he kills a guy just cuz he is annoying and next tries to make friends?) Though overall very plain story, no actualy world or character development. And your writing? Thats no storytelling its more like a statement after statement which feels very bland while reading. You certaintly have a lot of room to improve, best of luck
Skotadi
ManjiroSano
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I’ve read a little Birth of the demonic sword and yeah it’s really good but I didn’t pay any attention to it well thank you but well don’t expect me to improve a lot I’d rather read than write.
Origin_Saint:Kind of, well I'm not really a writer, but I've read a lot of books. Check out Birth of the demonic sword, re: level 100 farmer, and abyssal Lord of the magi world, for writing style. The writing styles used in those books are really immersive.
Felix created Skotadi through his imagination, it is precisely incredible, improbable, the reason is unknown. It's a story where the MC gains powers, it's fantastic, finding a reason for everything is not necessary. He didn't kill someone because he found them boring, please read it right. The MC is young, he is going through experiences, he will evolve in function, I do not find credible MCs who live thousands of years but who do not change their point of view, their morality etc ... There is a development, read on. Ok what do you mean by: "Thats no storytelling its more like a statement after statement which feels very bland while reading." ? Explain if you sincerely want me to improve.
If a reader has to "read right" you probably failed in conveying the message properly, but honestly you can ignore my words since I haven't read your book yet. And if he says statement after statement the problem might be related to showing and telling. I've seen this problem in a lot of fanfics and books. The fanfics will be like Since he really hated dragons he decided to kill all the dragons in the world. (telling) "AHHH!!!" with a final roar he slayed the last dragon in the world. 'I've finally done it... It took a thousand years but I've finally fulfilled my promise' he thought (showing)
ManjiroSano:Felix created Skotadi through his imagination, it is precisely incredible, improbable, the reason is unknown. It's a story where the MC gains powers, it's fantastic, finding a reason for everything is not necessary. He didn't kill someone because he found them boring, please read it right. The MC is young, he is going through experiences, he will evolve in function, I do not find credible MCs who live thousands of years but who do not change their point of view, their morality etc ... There is a development, read on. Ok what do you mean by: "Thats no storytelling its more like a statement after statement which feels very bland while reading." ? Explain if you sincerely want me to improve.
It's best to find the balance between both, but the main goal should be to stop your fic from looking like an essay
Origin_Saint:If a reader has to "read right" you probably failed in conveying the message properly, but honestly you can ignore my words since I haven't read your book yet. And if he says statement after statement the problem might be related to showing and telling. I've seen this problem in a lot of fanfics and books. The fanfics will be like Since he really hated dragons he decided to kill all the dragons in the world. (telling) "AHHH!!!" with a final roar he slayed the last dragon in the world. 'I've finally done it... It took a thousand years but I've finally fulfilled my promise' he thought (showing)
Origin_Saint:If a reader has to "read right" you probably failed in conveying the message properly, but honestly you can ignore my words since I haven't read your book yet. And if he says statement after statement the problem might be related to showing and telling. I've seen this problem in a lot of fanfics and books. The fanfics will be like Since he really hated dragons he decided to kill all the dragons in the world. (telling) "AHHH!!!" with a final roar he slayed the last dragon in the world. 'I've finally done it... It took a thousand years but I've finally fulfilled my promise' he thought (showing)
Kind of, well I'm not really a writer, but I've read a lot of books. Check out Birth of the demonic sword, re: level 100 farmer, and abyssal Lord of the magi world, for writing style. The writing styles used in those books are really immersive.
ManjiroSano:Are you saying that using the past can make the story less immersive?
ManjiroSano:I’ve read a little Birth of the demonic sword and yeah it’s really good but I didn’t pay any attention to it well thank you but well don’t expect me to improve a lot I’d rather read than write.