MC's name is Zax. He starts off cold, and only gets colder. The writing is well above average and thankfully the MC isn't dense. He's an adult. I love where it is going. The betrayal felt natural, evoked some emotion and stuff. I think the mood change from cynical, to sweet, to even more cynical drove away a variety of readers, but not me. Later, it gave weight to the secondary character of Tairo. I hate him soooooo much more. Thanks, author. Oh yeah... Harem. I'll just say... the details are 👌 Criticisms: The character introductions are a little too thorough. The initial testing scene where all the characters were introduced by fighting the instructor felt boring and cluttered. I simply wasn't invested in them yet. It would have been better to introduce them slower, with the same amount of low detail the apathetic MC's POV would have been, and keep many of their details in the writer notes, describing them when they became relevant to MC. Second, the limited use of the "save point" ability irritates me the most. Entire books can revolve around this concept, yet the MC often "forgets" about it, uses it for meaningless things like pranks and sweets, or escape self-imposed consequences. As a literary device, it lowers stakes but the payoff isn't maximized. (That's the whole point of the ability.) Not using it for everything makes the MC seem undisciplined. Also, the brain chip is voice-activated. What? I'm done.
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