it's bad the first chapter was actually ok, but after that, it turned into something maybe written by a 10-year-old @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@22
Eleets_Steele
Liked it!
This was my first try at writing a story like this. I know it wasnt a top tier work, and I had many things I wanted to change. I'm writing a rework of this story now.