Most part are good like what you see in most novels on this site but the issue I ran into is the over used of the "stuttering" it made reading just unbearable for me. the "you-you" is not how you write someone stuttering. The author might need to just google how to do stutters. Since you seem to like it too much and to me it looked over used in your chapters. especially 30-34 chapters. I just stopped reading since I could not make myself read any further.
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