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Deb_Nath_6301Lv13yrDeb_Nath_6301

That's been one hell of a mc. And the author sure do love girls. Everywhere I look, I see girls. From the start where mom character which can be scary at times when she gets questioned( cliche). To the dragonkin girl that that he found in the woods who again had a fiery personality and to the empress who has fiery personality. Then when the mc enters the kingdom, he finds a girl crying which ends up being his sister. And again to the archer girl whom she introduced himself without a mask and at one time even said she reminds him of the dragon kin girl.. how many girls do you need for your mc to be surrounded. And for someone with a dark past life he sure does have quite the hero syndrome. Learn to make reasonable characters and their development. You killed your story. Pity. Also give more world background if you want more immersion into the story.. I find it lacks details at times. Disappointed that a good story turned out bad just because of the authors poor decisions and unsteady character development and portrayal.

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New World - A New Beginning

kenkan

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Deb_Nath_6301
Deb_Nath_6301Lv1Deb_Nath_6301

No prob.. keep progessing. Hope your next book will be more experienced one considering this book gave you enough practice. Also try to stay far away from Chinese, japanese,korean cliches. Have a good day. Hugs.

kenkan:I’ll try my best to improve, there’s definitely points you make that I fully agree with haha. Thanks for giving my story a shot :)
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kenkanAuthorkenkan

I’ll try my best to improve, there’s definitely points you make that I fully agree with haha. Thanks for giving my story a shot :)