This is an impressive piece. It's obvious the author has put in a lot of thoughts and pre-planning. I'm a big fan of meticulous writing, and this definitely is one. For example, the first chapter manages to deliver a whole lot of information regarding the novel's fantasy world with just a few hundred words, but not in a "memorize this before you read on" way. That's a clear sign of the author's literary skill. Execution-wise I sense a bit of language barrier issue as evidenced by repeat use of expressions and words, but it's not too detrimental. I expect this will surely be ironed out as the author settles down on a style and then experiments with varying expressions and words. Two suggestions for the author; I think either sigil, glyph, or even rune would work better than the word formation. Also it would be a bit more noob-friendly if the you gave brief visual descriptions of the demons and beasts mentioned. But overall this story is fantastic. Big kudos!
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