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InHisName
InHisNameLv64yr
2020-10-02 10:03

The writing quality is terrible. Definitely needs a proofread, there isn't even capital letters, let alone punctuation. It hurts the eyes, that's for sure. 1 star. Stability of updates, sure, so far (02/10/2020) the author has updated frequently, almost every day. 5 stars. Story development...I'll be brutally honest....it's forced. The entire narrative of this story is incredibly forced by the author. The author clearly has some goal in mind, and he's working towards it regardless of details. There's sadly no logical progression at all. 1 star. Character design. It's a fanfiction, so the author has a huge advantage in that the character's personalities are pre-built by original authors. Yet somehow this author fails to convey even an ounce of personality. So far every character (including the MC) seems more like cardboard cutouts. 1 star. World background. Now this is where it gets sad. The entire theme of the novel is great. It's extremely creative, but somehow the author's execution of the world leaves much to be desired. 2 stars. Personally, I think the biggest problem with this story is the MC. The protagonist is the character who 'drives' the story, yet this protagonist is lifeless, and bland. In the end, just think of it as a disappointing Japanese isekai.

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wow never thought of that hehehe. anyway thank you for your advice man. i like your frankness and i need this to improve my writing skills. have a nice day man!

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