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Jimpaly
JimpalyLv24yr
2020-10-14 07:30

First of all, I’m going to point out that this story is around 70% action and 30% mystery. If you’re looking for action-packed scenes and descriptive fights, then this story’s for you. Other than that, I love the world-building you did in the beginning and as the story continues. The plot is eventful and interesting, but it feels like a lot of the mystery is already spoiled since it tells you who the bad guy is (but idk there might be more to the story that hadn’t been revealed yet). The supernatural abilities are placed well in the combat, though it might be nice to see them used outside of fights. The characters have nice interactions and there is a strong female lead, but you could give them clearer and more distinct personalities. The major issue is probably that you should work on your punctuation, sentencing, and paragraphing. Your word choice is great but there’s a lot you can improve. But overall, I love where the story’s going and I can’t wait for more!

Spirit Orbs : Chronicles of Ra'as

R_F_T_S
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252 Chs

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R_F_T_S
R_F_T_SAuthor

Thank you for this very detailed and uplifting review 😣 I'll try to work on the grammatical errors and I'll also try to work on the mystery aspect of the story but I promise you that the mystery is still in the early stages 😅

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Jimpaly
JimpalyLv2

Yup I think there was some foreshadowing of some higher power controlling everything. Can’t wait to see what it’s all about :)

R_F_T_S:Thank you for this very detailed and uplifting review 😣 I'll try to work on the grammatical errors and I'll also try to work on the mystery aspect of the story but I promise you that the mystery is still in the early stages 😅
4yr
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R_F_T_S
R_F_T_SAuthor

Fingers crossed 😁 can't reveal much as of now 😅

4yr
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