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For_my_dal
For_my_dalLv34yr
2020-09-28 01:28

Well done. I like the way the dream/premonition/ reincarnation work on him. Even tho I can see that you started off in as it seems post-apocalyptic era, I am glad how you explain every chapter and every step of his growth. The system is of course my favourite theme. I like that she is female in this case. And what's that with a childhood friend? Or will it be the Lieutenant? ;) Great start. I will check your later growth and review it again [img=recommend]

The Dawn of Heroes

Kotachua
4.6
11 Chs

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Kotachua
KotachuaAuthor

Thank you very much for your kind support!

4yr
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marialawal31
marialawal31Lv1

The tense switches back and forth between past and present so I'm not too sure when this is set. Some sentences need re-wording. But the idea is interesting, the character's personality shines through the dialogue and the start created mystery which would push the reader to want to find out more about the story.

4yr

EldritchTheDead
EldritchTheDeadLv2

Interesting story, its a mixture of sci-fi with fantasy based elements. Well written and i have not seen any grammatical errors so far. Good number of released chapters per week. Definitely worth the read as overtime the world background fleshes out each chapter. Would recommend to any reader out there.

4yr
RiniStella
RiniStellaLv1

The start of the story was good as reincarnation hints through the dream is not new for me. The black dot on the story is that it has too many intricate details which makes me skip a few lines. Sometimes leaving the readers to their own imagination can lift up your story when you unravel the mystery at the end.

4yr
iam_adh
iam_adhLv2

I love how the author explains everything in each chapter. I also like how the author does the reincarnation system through dreams, although I've seen it before, it's not as trashy as the top stories on this platform so that's a plus. I saw some grammatical errors here and there, but we're all human so no biggie. I like how the characters are introduced and I like how it seems to be in an apocalyptic theme. Honestly, this is a great piece of work, you nice keep going!

4yr
DaoistToDieFor
DaoistToDieForLv3

Well written start. I came up to your 6th chapter and so far I like it very much. Of course, I can't see yet the world development, but I can see his own. A female system is a nice addition. As I came up to the 6th chapter, I love the new character. Not going to give any spoiler. Hhehehehe. Truly well done.

4yr
JennyS
JennySLv5

I just came only to the 6th chapter and like the most... new side character. Sorry. But I have to admit that the way you explain the whole process makes me understand the beginning of a great story. You sat quite a good base for your novel. I promise I will make a review every twenty chapters. So the next one is at ch. 20. Have fun writing it. You are doing a good job so far.

4yr
insertsound
insertsoundLv1

I like the mix of genres! Superpowers and System are practically the same thing, but mix in a little bit of military in there makes it interesting. There are a few grammar mistakes here and there, but that can easily be improved! The character designs are nice, and the world-building is the best part of it. I haven't read all of the chapters yet, but overall I'm giving it a 4.6. Good luck, author! This looks promising!

4yr
RaedaX_1
RaedaX_1Lv12

The story is still in its eager stages, bit it's clear that the talent and potential is there. It's a shame that there are only four chapters, I was eager to read more. The flow was good, and the characters different enough. My only gripe with it is the tense inconsistency. Overall, one of the most promising works I've readd in a while

4yr
SleepyKola
SleepyKolaLv12

I couldn't particularly say a lot because there were only 4 chapters as the problems or climacs hadn't really occur, but i have to say the writing style is really good and the plots are really interesting. I could see the development building up within these chapters. Good work author! keep it up!

4yr
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