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Great start with an extensive prologue and good setting, but mediocre continuation at best. I liked how his powers were explained and how the author meshed everything together, but apart from that, I'm a bit disappointed. I wanted to write a longer review, but I accidentaly closed the window and I won't bother rewriting it. Basically, if you are looking for an OP MC, you are not looking for this fanfiction. Fast paced start and quite AU, with HP world mattering little. Neither should you read this if you are looking for a nice gamer fic with level ups and all, since this is not part of this fic. There is plenty that I liked, but even more that I disliked. From characters to the way the author writes to the world s/he wrote. The magic system is pretty neat, though I have no idea whether this is just using the marvel comics system or not. Over-all, the author is articulate and the text is of good quality, but there a plenty of points that go ignored in favour of unnecessary or boring parts. Oh, and this is not a Harry Potter fanfiction. This is a marvel fanfiction with the wizarding world being pretty much unimportant after the stretched prologue.
Harry Potter The Mutant Obscurus Gamer
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Accurate. To be perfectly honest, this isn't a story. This is a series of scenes and ideas I thought would be awesome if a story had that I never found in any other stories so I ended up stringing them together into a 'story' myself. Much of the content is somewhat skipped because those aren't the scenes I want to write. I don't want to write Harry eating dinner in the Great Hall and gossiping. I want to write Harry throwing himself a tea party in front of Death Eaters. My biggest problem is that I dislike doing something someone else has done so I do my best to keep it original. Those two combined issues are how I ended up decided what would happen Harry's "first" year. That is also why the Hogwarts arc is pretty light. Everything has already been done at Hogwarts! Don't make me re-write someone else's story! Now, most of what I want to do with Harry starts in New York, but I don't like all the Harry starts off in New York and becomes an OP Avenger fics. Sure, I wanted to write that, but I didn't want to Skip How He Became OP and Got to New York! That is basically what the whole of the first 3 arcs are.
I understand. I would enjoy several parts as their own one-/two-shots, like the Doctor Who chapters or the Dragon vs Power Ranger ones, but, as you said, stringing them together doesn't make them a great story. Even if the framework could support a great story. Maybe you could extend the synopsis to reflect that this is a marvel fic or something? Because a good part of what annoyed me was the dashed expectations of a gamer HP fiction. Good work anyway, you write very well :)
GnomeBob:Accurate. To be perfectly honest, this isn't a story. This is a series of scenes and ideas I thought would be awesome if a story had that I never found in any other stories so I ended up stringing them together into a 'story' myself. Much of the content is somewhat skipped because those aren't the scenes I want to write. I don't want to write Harry eating dinner in the Great Hall and gossiping. I want to write Harry throwing himself a tea party in front of Death Eaters. My biggest problem is that I dislike doing something someone else has done so I do my best to keep it original. Those two combined issues are how I ended up decided what would happen Harry's "first" year. That is also why the Hogwarts arc is pretty light. Everything has already been done at Hogwarts! Don't make me re-write someone else's story! Now, most of what I want to do with Harry starts in New York, but I don't like all the Harry starts off in New York and becomes an OP Avenger fics. Sure, I wanted to write that, but I didn't want to Skip How He Became OP and Got to New York! That is basically what the whole of the first 3 arcs are.
Unsure, since I only read till the low thirties, but given the rest, it should be at least decent with the first important one probably being the phoenix mutant
Deadrule_vivek:is the romance/harem done pretty good ?
Considering that author time skipped a hundred-year long training montage with two girls, and they are now in love with MC, yeah, not really.
Deadrule_vivek:is the romance/harem done pretty good ?