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tarwesty
tarwestyLv64yr
2020-10-02 12:48

I never review any thing before but I wrote this to share my constructive criticism and to help with your novel. this type of historical reincarnation is really my jam and your grammar is no problem in the most past. but how you tell the story is quite shallow what I mean is when I start reading it I felt like I'm reading the in early middle of story maybe you should just create what person is before he became the emporor and pacing is slightly too fast maybe just add mo banter between character to add depth or maybe description of place or people how they are? they general mood etc.

My German Empire

NeonLights
4.7
57 Chs

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Sasuke5962
Sasuke5962Lv14

I searched a very long tine for a book like this. Very goot storybuilding and grammar . I just hope to see more chapters. Plz moar. And don't drop it😀

4yr

Arkage
ArkageLv15

This novel is a hidden gem with a limited following of readers. If you enjoy alt history stories this is one you will enjoy. My only concern is that the author, Neonlights has dropped this. If Author-sama is reading this please, please, PLEASE keep this story going. Seriously PLEASE!!!!!!!!! The writing(grammar, spelling, sentence structure) is great. As far as I've read the historical references are accurate and the story building is balanced. So PLEASE DONT DROP THIS. This story is great and not about Nazis, if that is your concern. This is about Imperialism at its finest hour. Think a Second British Empire.

4yr
synncrytech3
synncrytech3Lv5

Really great book, looks like a lot of research has been done to create it as-well. I love these types of War novels the best, they teach me many things about history and historical figure, on top of being awesome. I hope the author doesn't drop it and continues forming the Great Reich!

4yr
Dranoel123
Dranoel123Lv15

I don't know which year he transmigrated in but overall it is a great book if you are interested in history.

4yr
WealthyRaccoon
WealthyRaccoonLv14

enjoyable alt history although it's hard to ignore how incredibly Chinese the dialogue is. lots of idioms, politicking, metaphors and faces; despite the accuracy of the portrayal of characters and events everything feels more than a little off? its odd considering the very real care that has gone into this story, that there would be such a significant cultural clash within it.

4yr
MisterImmortal
MisterImmortalLv14

Grammar needs work. But I'm a sucker for Historical Fictions like these. World War settings is also rare as most other novels start in middle ages. I am giving 5 stars because I really enjoyed reading this and I hope author does not drop it.

4yr
NikTitanik866
NikTitanik866Lv3

Sorry, but the blatant mistakes on the history of the period you are trying to remake have made it impossible for me to enjoy the story. The way people speak is also very strange, it feels like it came right out of an eastern drama. The author should've done more research on the plot.

4yr
ThatOneGUy
ThatOneGUyLv13

Great book, should get more reviews, love the story so far and if kept in the same standards for the rest of the way you have a possible best war and military genre book on the site comparable to Anderson's, please dont drop..

4yr
MJSB
MJSBLv4

hey authorsan ! is this story dropped? why are you not updating chapters anymore?this is a great story so pleased don't drop it. hey authorsan ! is this story dropped? why are you not updating chapters anymore?this is a great story so pleased don't drop it.

4yr
James_McDonald
James_McDonaldLv13

Needs Quite a bit of grammar work. The Premise of the story is quite good but there is a lack of development in the characters and in theIr background along with the thought process of the main character, and the reasons for his decisions. The story is based on old history but they don’t give in my opinion a significant explanation for why the von Hohenzollern Remain remain in power after the loss of world war one. Furthermore it fails to explain how most of the nobility maintained power in the same situation especially with the Junkers. Despite this it does give a small sense of the economic situation in Germany was in at the time Finally it appears that the author underestimates the technological developmental capabilities of other nations during this time even without accounting for brain drain that was happening in Germany, a process that helped more democratic nations gather a greater number of talanted academics. With all this said the storyline does proceed at a decent rate but could be better we could be more details to flavor the story up but it is a good read.

4yr
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